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first of all, I will preface by saying I only read to chapter 24 and no further. my thoughts on this story is that it has potential to become something quite good, however, there's a significant problem about giving the MC immortality as it removes most threats to them and can eventually make the story pretty boring. also, you made him far too powerful right off the bat. with every superhero, there has to be a kryptonite. without this, the character won't grow and become an interesting character for readers to become attached to. you've done a pretty good job at setting up some future events, but as of right now, the mc has no motivation to do anything. not only is that not engaging for the reader, but it's also going to affect the author. if the author doesn't love their character/story, neither will the reader. also, the spelling and grammar in this story is horrendous. find an editor.