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Xalysian
XalysianLv112yr
2022-12-14 16:32

A unique take on the VR game genre as the MC is the owner of said game and have his own cheat system within the game. I like it. Keep it up, man!

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One_Winged_Angel
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Writing Quality: I am really surprised at how well you have written your chapters. Is English your first language? If not, absolute great job! Your mistakes are few and far between and are extremely negligible in the progression of your chapters. Update Stability: Your Update stability looks... odd... Do you go back and edit your chapters constantly? It looks like you update your novel every other day or couple of days? I'd definitely recommend doing everything in your power to increase to at least once daily. Story Development: Wow! What a great read! Very compelling, interesting, and man, was I hooked! I am absolutely loving your story! The plot just draws you in and never lets go! Character Design: Lucio is your average Asian-esk MC, you know the type, "Average looks" "Average build" "Average Appearance to the outside world" but is presented in a well-defined manner that doesn't detract from the trope that he is filling, and it's done exceptionally well. Looking forward to seeing how the cast expands as there are many ways this could go! World Background: Modern-ish society with MMO craze, it's a tried and true genre but it's not straight in your face about it. The outside world is build just as well as the beginning we've seen of the in-game world. MC's history as well as his family's is such an appealing and breath of fresh air in the well saturated genre. Overall: Bang-on job man! I can definitely see this novel blowing up and becoming a top story on WN! Your style, tone, and plot are well developed. Stay consistent and you will definitely have a winner on your hands!

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