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2023-05-28 16:58

This review is based on the first three chapters as I believe these three are the "make or break" of any story. WRITING QUALITY: The grammar is okay. It was easy to understand but there were some random "deep words" here and there. The paragraph were also kinda long to my liking. I have the attention span of a goldfish that's why. PS. Your dialogue could be better. STABILITY OF UPDATES: Quite consistent, I guess. I checked the table of contents and found out the author started uploading six months ago. Sixty chapters in and three days continuous writing. STORY DEVELOPMENT: [spoilers] A lot have happened during the first three chaps. Some burly dude tryna bully him, he found a peculiar box, picked it up, it turned into a book after it drank some of his blood, then viola, transmigration. The pace was alright in my opinion. CHARACTER DESIGN: Could definitely do some work to be honest. WORLD BACKGROUND: Not much was told.

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