Item: The Divine God-(Slice of LIfe)
Rating: 4.6
Author: WriterTheos

WriterTheosLv142yr

2022-12-21 01:11

A very good first chapter. I liked the quick writing and smooth flow of the chapter, and also the concepts that it brings. The mc and setting is established nicely, as well as the goal. However, there are many Grammer and punctuation mistakes. A common one I saw was switching from first person to second person and third person in writing a lot. This can be confusing for readers. Also, the capitalization of the first letter in sentences does not happen, and also periods are missing a lot. Other than these mistakes and a few others, it's a very well rounded first chap. Good luck!

The Divine God-(Slice of LIfe)

The_Idiotic_Prince

4.6

31 Chs

Liked by 1 people

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The_Idiotic_PrinceAuthor

I will fix the grammar mistakes and will work on the POV,thanks for review

2yr

Other Reviews

The_Idiotic_PrinceAuthor

I am just giving it full rating because I think its my current 100%. but please do suggest if there is something anyone like to recommend. thank you for reading......

2yr

MarvelDoaistLv1

Thorough explanation on scenes and the story narration is pretty good! Character introduction is the best so far, with a good amount of emotions in each character, including the gods. Especially the color divison of souls....I'm kinda hooked with the detailed description of these parts. And the cons are author needs to work on his grammar wise, that's it. This book has a very good concept, that brings back some memories...Hope veryone give it a try. Note: Book is still in early stage... I will update my review later

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Olashile_MuhammedLv1

cool plotting and character design. Except for your writing quality which is not bad but not good either, As chapter goes on we see new development.

2yr

GalanarLv15

Okay, let's start with writing quality. I gave it 3 stars there because there are quite a few typos, wrong capitalization, choice of words, and the such. Also, you should spread out your paragraphs more. 2 sentences per paragraph make a nice format. Next update. Since I haven't read for a long time, I went with the content table. Every day seems perfect, so 5 stars :) Story development looked pretty steady to me. Although the beginning was a bit rushed in the few first paragraphs, it caught itself back after. 4 stars. Character design is also good, even though the naming threw me off a bit, with English names mixed in with Japanese names. So I gave it 4 stars. The world background was good enough, even if a little more detail on the structure of your planes could have been given, it was understandable and easy to follow. 4 stars also :) Keep up the good work :)

2yr

PsionicMindLv3

The story is very interesting and the protagonist is not super strong at the start and he also doesn't have a weird cheat. All in all, great creativity but lackluster writing quality. The Grammer is pretty ... underwhelming but I hope that the author improves as no one starts out perfect.

2yr

PandaDumplingLv3

The story development is really to my liking. Ryu as a character is also pretty good. The world background is very itriguing and makes me wanna find out more about it. Apart from the frequent grammatical errors and the stability of chapter releases, everything else was awesome. Keep up the good work! I hope to see more chapters released soon!

2yr

Hamzat_11Lv12

A good novel overall. I believe it would be nice if you watched your use of POV . You classified a part as Ryu POV, but you explained the part as a third party. Hope you improve on that.

2yr

Debbie_RozzLv1

The written quality is good, the plot is very nice and overall the book is very good. The writer did a good job with the story and I can't wait for your next update. Good job author.

2yr

OnlySupremeOneLv1

Except for your writing quality which is not bad but not good either,your story is okay. It's better to check your chapter before publishing them and reading it from reader's perspective. Keep up!

2yr

Jarvis47Lv1

The writing quality is good and story is also interesting but it's a slow start so it feels a little booring. As chapter goes on we see new development in MC's character.

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