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Salmon_El_Solomon
Salmon_El_SolomonLv31yr
2023-04-08 10:16

I do not seek to offend or insult anyone, it is my point of view. The novel has an interesting concept and premise. As for the rest: The mc feels stupid and meaningless, he trusts and falls in love EXTREMELY fast (in a matter of 1 paragraph or 1 chapter- I meet) just like the MC's girls, the romance is close to 0. There is no clear world development. The power system is totally unbalanced and with many inconsistencies and no senses. The mc's plot armor is at unnatural levels, equaling or even surpassing goku from DBZ or issei from DxD. In summary: A novel that could have had great potential, wasted by a lousy development.

Battle Harem of the Heavenly Sword

Yinghuo_392
4.0
316 Chs

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Yinghuo_392
Yinghuo_392Author

Thank you for your honest feedback. It is unfortunate you feel that way. Not many can understand the nuances of character development. Still, thank you for walking with me through valorious no matter how short it may have been.I hope you find a book that makes you happy on WN.

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Yinghuo_392
Yinghuo_392Author

Author here, Wrote this since I am a huge fan of battlemance novels or Battle Romance This book has equal parts battle and romance. Since I can't say arem less it gets censored. I'll omit the h. This arem will get huge, but the Mcs wives will forever remain at 3. Everyone in this story will have a arem or will be part of a arem. And large scale battles for the arems will be the norm. But a large portion will also focus on the main cast the mc and his three wives. This book is chuuni so cringe with me as we self insert. This book is written by Me, so characters with actual development is necessary. This book already has a set end so it won't go on forever. I write with the end in mind so the plot should be tight and without plot holes. I hope you guys enjoy the initial 30 chapter release. I plan to release 1 chapter a day afterwards. I have ps targets so hit them if you want more. Should I get contracted I will add GT targets as well. Stay awesome and enjoy the read. Here is a picture of my writing buddies.

2yr

Count_Fro
Count_FroLv15

Through the 65 chs that have been published so far this story hasn’t disappointed at all … interesting world with lots of potential history and lore to be unearthed, solid MC and heroines whose characters are developing nicely, villains with unclear motivations, and a novel (at least to me) power system that I’m curious to see more of. Please read and support so the author can write many many more chapters for everyone to enjoy. 👍👍

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Kayle999
Kayle999Lv1

Great novel overall . The MC may be Naive and easygoing at early chapters but he has Strong Unbending Will to keep moving forward. Great waifus as well The story is a very dark and grim at early chapters betrayals,manipulations and stuff. Well this novel is full of suffering. But Good character development. SO ANYWAYS I STOPPED READING THIS NOVEL. WHY U ASK?? with how things is going im sure one of the MC waifus will die or get stolen or NTR i guess??possibly so because this world is very cruel. And im the type of person who gets great anxiety just thinking about it my loved ones suffering. Every chapter gives me more anxiety so i stopped reading. ANYWAYS if you're the type of person like me stop reading this. ABANDON ALL HOPE YE WHO ENTER HERE!!

1yr
Hidden_Paragon
Hidden_ParagonLv3

This books deserves more than 5 stars. Thanks for your work friend.

1yr
Jeremy_Whitney
Jeremy_WhitneyLv4

great book so far. it grips your attention and keeps it.

1yr
yamete_kudasai
yamete_kudasaiLv4

this will include everything in one sentence .. the mc is cringe Japanese beta simp protagonist. and story is all over the place .. many situations doesn't make sense . .if you can handle it then go ahead and read it . but after 20 chapter I got very annoyed .

1yr
kartik_agarwal
kartik_agarwalLv3

Review after the 45 free chapters - I am confused on how much I should tate this novel. While I found many parts of the novel cringeworthy, like mc being a simp in beginning, or every person in the city being stupid, just trying to humiliate mc and his wife, and mc getting massive powerups from the system within just days, these all things make the story cringey. Still there are some things I like in the novel, like the pacing is good, and writing quality of author is good, that he made me look forward to even such cringey story. Also, the romance is good, the heroines are not the conventional female archetypes, which I like. My only suggestion is - improve the pacing of story even more by making non necessary fights even shorter, like the fight with goblins.

1yr
Monarch_of_ShadowR
Monarch_of_ShadowRLv4

It's a great story I think it's really unique

1yr
Eram_Hossain_5461
Eram_Hossain_5461Lv4

Love the story so far and gonna keep reading.Only downside i see is that a 33 year old is not supposed to be like he is at the beginning even without all the caliber issues

1yr
DRAVEN_
DRAVEN_Lv13

Just want to ask MC won't get cucked right?

1yr
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