So the writing quality is not quite there. I can tell english is not your main language from how certain verbs are used or wrote. You might want to get an editing software, it really helps. I also feel like the story isn't really moving forward, from the one chapter I read, but that just might be the fact that it is really short. The character design was pretty good, but they could still be described a lottle more. I gave 3 stars on update because I don't know how often you update and also 3 stars on world background, because I feel like you barely brushed upon it. But keep up the good work, it has potential :)
146whitewolf
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LIKEGalanar:I mean to say that not much happened in that one chapter. I know it was short, but in terms of real time, that chapter would span a few minutes at most. That is what I meant by not much is happening :)
I mean to say that not much happened in that one chapter. I know it was short, but in terms of real time, that chapter would span a few minutes at most. That is what I meant by not much is happening :)
146whitewolf:Thank you for the feedback. How can you get a feel of the world building if you only read one chapter? you can't read one chapter and said it's not moving .......
Galanar:I mean to say that not much happened in that one chapter. I know it was short, but in terms of real time, that chapter would span a few minutes at most. That is what I meant by not much is happening :)
Galanar:I mean to say that not much happened in that one chapter. I know it was short, but in terms of real time, that chapter would span a few minutes at most. That is what I meant by not much is happening :)