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Lord_RahlLLLLv11yr
2023-10-04 20:18

Very cool job. A great idea for ff and a good implementation. Yes, there are small flaws in spelling and a couple of plot holes, but you don't pay attention to it. Yes, the main character is already too MC at the end, he is already in fact not in danger and in terms of the plot, unfortunately, everything comes down to came, saw, won. In general, I recommend

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Torhelm
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Your other novel, "God of Valyria" was good, but you made him too OP way too fast and put him on the top of the world basically in the first 20 chapters. Hope you can keep the balance this time and finish out the story because I like the way it's looking so far. If not, hopefully you can at least do it like you did in God of Valyria and make a final chapter finishing it out.

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_oinkchan
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I am known for novels on the lighter side, some are funny despite being morally disgusting while some are just absurd. However, this one does not fall into either character. A serious work, compared to all others of mine but if you have read any work of mine or ever spoken with me, then you know I am trustable. A real vampire Targeryan mc. No reincarnation or prior knowledge. With your support, I am invincible. Hope you enjoy this fanfic.

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_Sword_Immortal
_Sword_ImmortalLv12

Nice start 👍 Although I hope this doesn't get dropped like the previous one😕. Amazing writing skills btw. [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

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Melshan
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Aidoneus_Senpai
Aidoneus_SenpaiLv5

Noice, just found this new fanfic by oink!! It's been amazing so far!! I just really hope there aren't as many crossovers like your last fanfic. God of Valyria started off amazing but the MC got OP too fast and the multiple crossovers made the story harder and harder to read. So far, this fanfic has the same amazing start as God of Valyria but none of its later issues!! I can't wait for more!!

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LichKing
LichKingLv4

Very interesting concept. The grammar and writing quality are very good. The only potential issue that I see with the character is that he could get very strong very fast, and then it would not feel worth it. Maybe remove some of his powers or change them to suit his Valyrian heritage? Please implement challenges and obstacles for our MC to face that naturally flow with the story and further the plot. I just wish you would post longer chapters more frequently because this is a great story with great potential!

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ViaSky
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All I can say is give me more plz. [img=recommend]

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Nemesis_2466
Nemesis_2466Lv4

So far great. I get goosebumps imagining the scenes you wrote

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accidentaljihad
accidentaljihadLv15

well written so far and a lot of potential

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SleepingBeauty_
SleepingBeauty_Lv5

Reveal spoiler

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