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3LegSan
3LegSanLv12yr
2022-11-01 18:45

The main character just got more unlikeable the more I read. You changed things and yet it seems it results into nothing being changed at the same time. Most of the story feels skipped over and summarized. I feel like you could have gave a better storyline if you had explained many things, but again, most of it was just glossed over. Timeskips upon timeskips. One moment MC is speaking about his marriage and the next Laena is giving birth to their third child. And like I said before, the main character just became extremely unlikeable. Marrying off his daughter was the last straw.

Game of Thrones: Bastard At The Dance

CruzControl67
3.2
23 Chs

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Truth_Only_Reader
Truth_Only_ReaderLv5

Politics! You hate it or you love it!

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ViciousHandler
ViciousHandlerLv5

Thanks for this review. sounds like novel is kind of trashy if true.

2yr
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IamBoredGuy
IamBoredGuyLv4

Everything is good except for the story development and character design. When I read chapter 1 and the first paragraph, I finally realized why I find this fic so jarring. The MC is a feminist. He does not want authority and only wants a simple life with his family, but for his sister, the future Queen, he's willing to abandon his family, turn his eyes on his sister's mistakes, sell his daughter to the brother of the one who took her eye, all the while complaining why he didn't want any of it. Not a single character development throughout the story. He still remains someone's loyal dog, despite all his achievements, position, and his experiences. Despite everything being changed, when you read it again, nothing was actually changed. You just replaced Daemon with your MC to simp for Rhaenirya. (At least Daemon was badàss. Your MC is just a glorified masochistic dog.) I would have sympathized but I just couldn't. I think you're going down the Jon Snow route but all his complaining and his actions not matching is painful to read. I don't know what future development you would make, but this is as far as I go. Nevertheless, your story was entertaining but I find it not to my taste.

2yr

Dryk_M_5536
Dryk_M_5536Lv2

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Random_Name_7
Random_Name_7Lv1

I was initially excited for this but the mc decisions became progressively worse with time and things are explained less and less. Ultimately this story became unreadable for me which is why I give it three stars. You could improve this by fleshing the characters out more and giving the mc a little bit more backbone.

2yr
_James_Jones_
_James_Jones_Lv5

very bad the mc is a useless coward and the story is very boring with each chapter the story and the mc got worse and worse [img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

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RDAT
RDATLv6

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Dido_Oscar
Dido_OscarLv4

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GodOfLightning
GodOfLightningLv14

The character is a feminist and no depth to the characters

2yr
xKitetsu
xKitetsuLv4

Good fic really does give game of thrones vibes.

2yr
Kffjj_Hgf
Kffjj_HgfLv1

Nice nice nice nice nice Uouluo sword und die hat doch gesagt das und ich habe keine Ahnung ob ich die uns noch mal besuchen muss oder die anderen die ich

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