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2022-12-23 04:25

it's such a nice work of art with great potentials. Good work.

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BishopsNemesis
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The world building in this novel is quite detailed and immersive. The setting of the story is in a world where humans and demons coexist, and the concept of Magi and their role in society is well-established. The inclusion of a city specifically for the training of Magi, as well as the existence of guilds and the Ether test, helps to flesh out the world and give it a sense of depth and complexity. The characters in this novel are also well-developed, with distinct personalities and motivations. Caleb, the protagonist, undergoes significant character development over the course of the story, starting as a helpless victim and eventually becoming a powerful Magus. Lizz, his sister, is a strong and capable character who plays a key role in the plot. The demon antagonist is also well-written, with a clear goal and a believable motivation for his actions. One aspect that could be improved in this novel is the pacing. Some of the scenes in the later chapters feel a bit rushed, and it would be helpful to have more time spent on developing the relationships and motivations of the characters. Additionally, there are a few instances of awkward or repetitive language, which could be smoothed out with some editing. Overall, this novel has a compelling world and well-written characters, but could benefit from some improvement in pacing and language. "The holy scrolls state that rain during the brightest time of the year is a sign indicating to us that a dark future lies ahead of us" (indicates a well-developed world with its own mythology and customs) "Caleb, the funeral contributions are nearly over, we have to get going" (shows Lizz's caring and responsible nature) "It's not that I don't want to show any emotions, for some reason, it's just hard for me to show any..." (demonstrates Caleb's internal struggle and character development) "It seems you and your sword have nothing else to offer to me" (reveals the demon's confidence and arrogance)

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