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Shaminess
ShaminessLv41yr
2024-01-01 00:49

The idea is interesting and it has a lot of potential. Sadly the writing style makes it difficult to enjoy the story. The repeat of the same sentences in different words feels like unnecessary padding and the constant use of big words feels like the author is trying too hard to make sure we know they are intelligent. In addition, the dialogue between characters is lacking in volume and the conversations feel stunted. I think this fic is salvageable though if more effort is moved away from describing everything in as big words as possible and into focusing more on the dialogue between characters.

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