I honestly expected more. There are too many plot holes that are not explained, on the one hand I understand them, it's just fanfiction written by a fan, but on the other hand there are things that should or need to be explained. 1.-The fact that having knowledge of future events does not affect him (it does not explain whether the system protects him or not, one must infer it) 2.- The ability to name entities without consequences (another aspect of the system perhaps) 3.- The principle of indestructibility of the beyonder characteristics (What happens to them once the system absorbs them) 4.- The lack of details of places or descriptions of the environment (dates, names, places, etc.) Personally, these kinds of stories are largely defined by the details.
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It's obvious that you didn't fully read the book(and it's okay, I also don't fully read books I don't enjoy reading). You could argue that my writing is bad and the plot is lacking, but I don't think that there is a plot hole that isn't or won't be explained in the future. All the points you've mentioned have already been answered in later chapters. As for the lack of details, it is a a valid point and I think that I've become better. As you said, this is a fanfic that I write because I have too much free time and I love the world of the Lord of the Mysteries. No matter what, I appreciate the fact that you took some time to leave some feedback.
Don't get me wrong, your story isn't bad, it's actually quite good. I think that comparisons with LoTM are not necessary, as long as there are valid arguments involved. When I spoke of plot holes I meant that they were not explained in the first chapters (hoping that later the reason will be argued) and also in part to clarify them, since the writer can often overlook things. But even so I intend to follow your story, for the simple fact of being very interesting, there are few stories of this style and I would like to see what happens with yours in the future. Note: It would be interesting to add several points of view, especially that of Klein in the meetings, with what happened in the first one, I was left with the doubt of how he reacted to the fact that he could not finish the meeting when seeing Alexander still present xD. (Klein is one of those characters who analyzes every situation, so bothering him with misunderstandings and awkward situations would be great)
At the start I had already written about Klein's reaction and his thoughts, but I felt that it was making the already slow plot even slower. Next time I will write them though and see if people enjoy it or not.
Actually I don't feel that the plot is slow, the first chapters felt fast due to its progress, but you gave a good argument that it would be the prologue and that it would have more influence in the future due to his power. Also taking into account that the people who read it are people who are fans of LoTM (with an immense amount of detail) or people who have ever read it. Just take your time, I've seen a lot of people leave this site largely due to the comments (Pretty toxic website).
