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2022-10-13 03:43

As always, I would remind everyone that star rating can't rate everything about novel. So don't mind the star rating I give. Anyway, I reach 3rd chapter and I don't think I can continue. First, author should know that it's "chapter" instead of "charapter". The title spelling is wrong and I feel sad that none of reader help reminding author and help author improve/fix his mistake. Secondly, the sentence is readable(have alot of space to improve in term of grammar, not saying I'm good in English myself but I can still see that author is a bit beginner in English. Keep it up, you can definitely improve.πŸ‘) but the symbol. The dialogue is weird because of symbol and a bit disconnected. Like you can't feel the dialogue flow, the dynamic. Maybe because author rush it a bit. Slow down, explore more(Reveal character appearance description at least.). Thirdly, the system itself. It kind of just vague with little explanation. Maybe author could read some other system type novel and see how they introduce the system. You got it right, only a bit vague that kind of like blur image. I wish you well and your story enter ranking. Its not my cup of tea but I hope you keep writing. Maybe someday... πŸ‘πŸ‘

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Thank you very much for the criticism. I corrected the chapter titles.

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