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2023-03-24 03:10

My only problem with this is the constant info dumping. One moment 2 people are talking to each other, then after the first 2 sentences, we get an explanation on how strong they are, how much universes they could destroy/trancendence, what law they have and thiers background that. I feel like you could introduce these slowly, like when they fight you could tell us the law they used or how powerful they're skill was.

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animeanything
animeanythingLv13

What I mean is try not to over describe things but overall I'd say it's a fun read

Lady_Nine_Tails
Lady_Nine_TailsAuthor

Yes, this is the only major drawback I have with this novel myself. So far, I realized that reducing the info dump, will reduce the word count greatly... So I've just focused on the current chapters 250+, and hope that they'll be better than the prior chapters. (From 350 chapters going down, I wrote it back during high-school, and I'm only editing things now, so hipefully, things will get better, including the writing quality and the plot) Well that's irrelevant, the main point for this comment is: Thanks for the review and the motivations. Means a lot to me, God bless~

animeanything:What I mean is try not to over describe things but overall I'd say it's a fun read
Lady_Nine_Tails
Lady_Nine_TailsAuthor

I'll do so, no worries~

animeanything:What I mean is try not to over describe things but overall I'd say it's a fun read
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