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Violet_Ivory
Violet_IvoryLv32yr
2022-10-14 17:56

Read half the chapters, so basically 4 of them. from the first chapter, i was getting major naruto vibes, the whole hidden sealed village and all that. then the other 2 characters were shown and i was like, “ok, a pink haired girl and a boy with spikey black hair, hmmm”. i just hope you give them enough personality to make them shine as individuals. There has been some hinting towards the ML acting older than he already s, but no explanation of why or how. i feel Like that shouldve been added within the first 4 chapters but alas. Your use of english is simple with no grammar mistakes i could point out. But there were times where i noticed the sentences being longer than necessary. If you play your cards right, you could have a pretty good story, good job. keep writing ✍️

The Rift: Masked Phantom

Jims_Rid
4.7
43 Chs

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Jims_Rid
Jims_RidAuthor

I see. Noted. Thank you for your review. Other characters will have their time to shine, as well as character development. As for my writing, I'm expanding my vocabulary.

2yr
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Jims_Rid
Jims_RidAuthor

Author's review here with the mandatory perfect score review Here's what to expect: 1. Romance, yes there will be romance but no harem 2. OP MC? Not really, but strong. 3. Character developments are welcome 4. MC has two personas, The Masked Phantom and his regular self for safety reasons 5. Update schedule: 1 chapter daily 6. No Systems

2yr

Rin_Nurnia
Rin_NurniaLv4

By reading from the first chapter, it was really good and I can see the characters background from the mc and some of the characters. So far, I didn't find any grammar mistakes so that's a bonus. Keep it up👍🏻

2yr
Noobelista
NoobelistaLv2

Writing quality is good while updates are stable. The flow of the story is going in an excellent direction. I'm getting a few naruto vibes and it's going well. As for the characters, the MC is good but a bit is lacking in the thought process, which can still be fixed. As for other characters, I love how the author pays attention to character development. World background is slowly being explained. Overall, it's a good read

2yr
Little_North_Star
Little_North_StarLv14

The book is great especially the first few chapters, the world background is cool and the characters are cool too. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend] Good job author

2yr
CHVA2001
CHVA2001Lv4

Interesting story and characters and world background are well described and good plot and writing quality is also good and keep releasing new chapters

2yr
_Rockbison_
_Rockbison_Lv3

Always a fan of reincarnation type story because it gives me a lots of rolarcoaster type of vibes which l can find in this stiry as well... The writting quality is good as tge story background.... The author has did a very great job creating such a nice story... recommend to everyone... It won't bore you..

2yr
VoidCeremonist
VoidCeremonistLv1

Enjoyable read and fluid writing style. I actually love the world building and the concept of sealing magic and the way the mc uses his spatial powers in such a setting just seems really cool to me somehow. Again, your interpretation of sealing magic really flashed me. The pacing is pretty good and the dialogue doesn’t feel forced,

2yr
_DarkDestiny_
_DarkDestiny_Lv1

Reveal spoiler

2yr
Washee_Washee
Washee_WasheeLv2

So reading this, I will definitely say it was a fun and engaging read. The plot is straightforward and simple, with the pacing nice and not too fast. The characters themselves are engaging to follow and their interactions are nice. Criticism wise, I guess I could say that maybe the overall grammar and syntax could be better, but that in my opinion is largely superficial and can be rectified. In short great story which I would highly recommend.

2yr
Willhem_Duy
Willhem_DuyLv2

Right from the start, it gets me the "naruto" feelings, but it is still original enough with its balance magic system. The main character does feel quite overpowering a bit. There are a few minor grammar errors when you look at it, but the narrative is straightforward. I would recommend you go further than chapter 5 for an enjoyable experience. 7/10

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