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2022-10-31 08:23

Your book was alright, I guess, but the one thing I didn't like about it was the lack of vocabulary. You seemed to be using a lot of the same phrases repeatedly. However, other from that, I believe it was a fine book.

Seal The Heart

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BishopsNemesis
BishopsNemesisLv1

Overall, the world setting in these 5 chapters that I have read there appears to be a blend of reality and fantasy, with elements of a supernatural realm coexisting with the modern world. The inclusion of characters with supernatural abilities, such as the ability to materialize, adds an interesting and unique aspect to the world building. However, it would be helpful to have more explicit explanations and descriptions of the rules and limitations of these abilities in order to fully understand and become immersed in this world. The characters in these chapters, particularly Maya and Amiri, are complex and multifaceted, with their own motivations, desires, and flaws. The portrayal conflicts and dynamics between these characters, such as the strained relationship between Maya and Amiri, add depth and realism to their personalities. However, it would be beneficial to provide more background and context for these characters in order to fully understand their actions and motivations. Overall, the grammar and writing in these chapters is generally clear and easy to follow. However, there are some instances of awkward phrasing and repetitive use of certain words or phrases that could be improved upon. One constructive criticism would be to focus on developing a clear and consistent narrative structure, including a clear plot and character arc. While there are hints of conflicts and plot points introduced in these chapters, they often feel disconnected and disjointed, leaving the reader feeling uncertain about the direction of the story. It would also be helpful to provide more context and explanation for the various events and characters introduced, as they can feel confusing and confusing without proper setup and development. From a psychological perspective, the portrayal struggles and conflicts of the characters, particularly Maya's internal turmoil and her strained relationship with her father, suggest deeper underlying issues and past traumas that could be explored in greater depth. The portrayal behaviors and actions of the characters, such as Maya's arrogance and hot temper, could also be further analyzed and examined in terms of their psychological motivations and impacts on the characters' relationships and personal growth. Overall, these 5 chapters that I have read show promise in terms of world building and character development. With some improvements in grammar and more context and depth in the interactions between the characters, the story has the potential to be engaging and captivating. I hope you keep up the good work and upload constantly which is one of the most important things which I'm glad you have many chapters uploaded to support that.

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Anniasa_Uchiha
Anniasa_UchihaLv1

I love it and, but it needs more work on the story give details on what the characters are wearing and where they stand next to each other, if there are emotions like love or sadness. what I felt as I am reading that the main character is blunt and shows anger, but the rest of the characters just gives me mute emotions like they don't really have any. I so wanted there to be emotions because it calls READ me and enjoy me, I can show you more than anything in the whole world, other than not many emotions. it was very good and i must have more

2yr
Justin_Gabventure
Justin_GabventureLv13

I must say, this novel is quite intriguing...it's superb. I was immersed in that little world of maya, and now I am waiting for updates from the author. I highly recommend this book as I am sure many people would like it

2yr
Justin_Gabventure
Justin_GabventureLv13

I must say, this novel is quite intriguing...it's superb. I was immersed in that little world of maya, and now I am waiting for updates from the author. I highly recommend this book as I am sure many people would like it

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