Review Detail of liyanpark1013 in The lighted lantern (Arelins)

It was intriguing story from the given synopsis and it was a nice start. The grammar needed to fix in order to understand more but I know you have a potential creating unique story. I've read some of like this and it was very rare. I suggest if you want to make it lighter and more exciting, you can use onomatopoeia instead of using much punctuation. But overall, it was a good novel and highly suggested to the readers. keep up the good work Author!