Review Detail of Boogada23456 in AS DARKSEID IN MARVEL (OMNIVERSE)

Alright let start with the praises, the way you handled the mc personalities and power is one of the best points of this novel. At least unlike some others you didn’t shame the name of Darkside by making a coward(cough p@ssy) of an mc that is hung up with not only his morality, but his naivety of human nature making there mc a whiny little sh¥t. Now onto the bad parts the way you introduce the girls is not wrong but not right either when describing them it should be through the mc eyes not the authors it will give it a better impact/impression to the reader also the not giving them a name till the end of the description part is best to reveal them unless you want this girl to be mysterious having us guessing only revealing who she is when she meets the mc because if you are going to reveal the name then why omit it, it just comes off as annoying. Now for the main problems of this novel is that it has no foundation for his dream to conqueror everything, it’s pretty vague and kinda empty, collecting the girls is less vague at the moment. Are you going to kingdom/empire build how are you going to lead it ……etc there are so many things you can do but none of it has been addressed because 2 chapters in it started a side story that still hasn’t ended!!! Let’s wrap this up with an idea you can have the mc pastime messing with the main world hero’s and villains in this case earth while his army conquerors the universe also don’t forget to put people that can fight the mc because bulldozing through everything gets boring and one of this novel main points it the mc power growth anyways fun novel and hoping for more chapters.