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Sacoguns
SacogunsLv152yr
2022-10-14 12:19

I read your book to date, which is 23 chapters. Before my review, I request that you stop leaving advertising comments on gift comments of other author’s chapters. It is rude and annoying. It is not a practice done by good authors. Review: Your storyline is new compared with the many books I have read. However, it lacks in maturity. The sentences are often “choppy” and do not flow well. The story is rushed, so you don’t get a feel for the surroundings. The first chapters representing 7+ years reads more like a synopsis. Take your time to develop the story. You want to create a book that draws people back to it and entices readers to not only come back, but pay coins and drop gifts. At present, as an experienced reader of many books, this will not be a book I keep in my bookshelf.

MY RUTHLESS VAMPIRE

ItsEllie
4.6
26 Chs

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ItsEllie
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thanks for your review, I promise to develop my story with time 🥺♥️

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ItsEllie
ItsEllieAuthor

Hi guys! it's the author of 'Married to a ruthless vampire'. I'd really be happy if you share, read, comment or vote if possible. I'm going to be updating and editing my story so I'll need your full time support. Thanks 🤍

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DonDenis
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The story's been brilliant so far, good world building and nice pacing to it. The updates are also nice. Keep up the good work author! keep up the good work

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Moonwriting
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hi dear....the book concept is quite interesting and your writing skill made it alive to imagine. The characters are intriguing and well-designed. The world background leaves you awestruck...the more I read it more I like it... great job and good read dear..

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NERDY
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The character and plot description is seriously very good. You gonna love it seriously. I'm hoping that you can carry out your efforts. There is some mistakes but author is constantly improving it. LOVE IT

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Turquoise24
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Nice work! I must say it's interesting and engaging from the start. Couldn't put it down, read all chapters until stumbled on the " To be continued" page. Waiting for more. Update it soon pls.

2yr
Jaison_Arbor
Jaison_ArborLv2

I liked the world background and how the story is progressing, the author has done a great job in the turns of events, and best of luck to the author for writing further, and don't get disheartened, your story is good, I hope you keep writing ^-^.

2yr
Fern_fleur
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I think it's very good 😊. The chapters are short but interesting, and since it's chapter 15 I think it's perfect time to add the review. So , I'd say the world background is kinda idk? like realistic fiction? but other than that I like the whole story line. Looking forward to more chapters 😊

2yr
Kamera189
Kamera189Lv2

Pretty fun read so far, I love the world mainly but the characters have also been pretty decent along with everything else so far in my opinion. Keep up the great work!

2yr
Maryam_Aldariya
Maryam_AldariyaLv2

Dear author, I wish you let me know sooner about this genre because this is exactly my number 1 genre! I love your storyline & I wish you the best for completing the story! This is my favourite so far! [img=update][img=update][img=update]

2yr
Emmanuel_Abraham_2079
Emmanuel_Abraham_2079Lv1

I love the story. Its gradual build-up is fantastic and the way the story is developing shows its potential. There is no doubt that with the direction of the story, there is more to enjoy!

2yr
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