it is a good story with good comedy and a character personality according to the canon. The only problems I give him would be the system (mc slave) and his way of earning excess money at only 13 years old (a large part of the plot focuses on this topic) apart from being boring, it takes away some seriousness when he has to explain it to half the world without mentioning that he interacts with adults like nothing happened (directors and actresses)
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Well the money aspect is essentially the whole topic so you can't blame me for that. In regards to boring I am sad that you were bored but hey I ain't a big writer with experience but a rookie writer so you have to tolerate me at times...plus this like the first book of mine that has over 50 chapters something I have never done before. I am also trying to improve the story and other aspects as the story progresses so hopefully if you continue to read you will find things slowly get better.
the mc is only 13 years old he doesn't have to be so desperate for money the series spans 11 years he has time to spare plus so many people talking to a 13 year old as an adult (all adults outside of the main cast) doesn't really add up. Outside of that topic, your story is very funny and well done, so I still plan on following it.
CultivatorReader:Well the money aspect is essentially the whole topic so you can't blame me for that. In regards to boring I am sad that you were bored but hey I ain't a big writer with experience but a rookie writer so you have to tolerate me at times...plus this like the first book of mine that has over 50 chapters something I have never done before. I am also trying to improve the story and other aspects as the story progresses so hopefully if you continue to read you will find things slowly get better.
