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AbandonedddddLv22yr
2022-09-26 23:42

Hello dear author. I leave this review in order to encourage you to keep moving forward. Your story is good. If I have to raise a point, it is that your writing is quite rushed. Don't rush, take the time to shape your plot and character interactions well. That way, you won't get stuck a few chapters down the road. Also, regarding the system. I haven't written a novel with a system yet (by the way I'm also a young author like you, let's support each other 😉 ) but I've read enough on the subject. My advice is to take inspiration from the one in the solo Leveling novel called "i level up alone"( not very sure)😅. The presentation of the system is quite well done. Finally, don't give up and don't give up. I know you are just writing for a hobby but think there is an audience out there that follows you and supports you. I know it can be hard and painful at times, but this is the path you have chosen and see it through (this message is also for me😂). Okay I've blabbed too much. Your story is beautiful and I wish you the best. 👋👋

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DaoistViyIkE
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DaoistViyIkE
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I decided to stick to the plot so I mostly copied a lot. Besides, I'm still studying and working part-time, but POV is my favorite series. Whenever I have time, I will update the story for you to support. Anyway, that's just my wish, maybe I'm still pretty bad at writing and haven't created anything new. My English is also not good, and I often use Google, so later on, I feel quite depressed about such comments. Finally, thank you everyone for supporting me, I quite like the comments "Thank you chapter" because from that I know that at least there is still motivation to continue this story. I myself have a lot of pressure in my life, but constantly having to see those comments makes me not in the mood to write. If you don't like the story, you can read another story. Maybe I don't need a lot of people watching or reading. If you enjoy reading my stories, that's my pleasure.

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SlimeSage
SlimeSageLv14

I like the story! But I had a hunch that this'll be dropped, so I'll change my review to 5 star if it reaches atleast 50 chapters!

2yr
PkhtyVKJGUDkh
PkhtyVKJGUDkhLv12

90% copy-paste. 90% of Jin-w- I mean Sirius's actions are also a copy-paste of Ren's actions. Ren does exist in the world, except that the "author" seems to completely forget about him. (example: Sirius fights Elijah instead of Ren. But where did Ren go???)

2yr
Daoist1JrigW
Daoist1JrigWLv1

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The_Zen_Boy
The_Zen_BoyLv4

just NO !! . . . . . . . [img=fp][img=coins][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap][img=faceslap]

2yr
Zekril
ZekrilLv4

Dude fix that system of your Always save a note of its progress the name of skills and index changer everytime he sheck his status and the value doest add up he have 31 strength and 10 to evething in stats at level why but why it become 36 strength and 16 every stat when he reach level 7

2yr
Gajin_Snail
Gajin_SnailLv3

very good i hope its not dropped [img=update][img=update][img=update][img=update]

1yr
Hgoma
HgomaLv4

idea have potential if executed correctly. as of now Sirius is just doing whatever Ren did in the orignal novel even though it is leaving plot holes , there are multiple plot holes but I'm too lazy to write about them

2yr
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