Yo this novel is good and all but the writing is confusing. Like the pov switching is weird and peoples thoughts look like regular paragraphs. I think you need to start reading your chapters and check them. Sometimes double check them to be sure. Or read other novels to help improve your writing.
Choka
Liked by 4 people
LIKEYou can't expect me to write something good on my first day of writing mate. New authors are doing way worse than this as I'm seeing. I did read hundreds of books and I'm trying to constantly improve as a writer, I went through the whole novel more than 30 times and I'm constantly editing everything I could, but everything starts so slow mate. Thanks for your review and I actually remembered to focus more on fixing first chapters cause of you, I appreciate it ☺️. Hope you keep reading till at some point you like what you reading.