Your writing style is simple, that's good but you have to work on the typos and punctuations. Your writing seems a bit rushed. I think you need to improve your descriptions. Your story has potential. At first I wasn't getting it but as I read more it looked good. I personally think of you read more of your genre and slow down a bit, your art could be magic.
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