Review Detail of o0_SnakeEater_0o in The Marvel-Overwatch Journey (old copy rewrite up)

I like the gist of the story but don't like how it's presented. It's written is bit clunky and all over the place. I feel like this story lacks focus. The story has potential overall as it is right now I feel like it's mid. I also think it's silly that the main character has seen so many years of horrible shit with Tracer for what like centuries or something, and still has a mental breakdown after being reincarnated.