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2022-09-24 17:55

The cover and title is catchy and hooking. Though I want to be frank, the chapter was pretty long and I suffered a bit. Make it 1.5k words per chap. You need to improve your grammar and pacing too. All in all, a good read. Though it needs improvement. Details and narration were jumpy too and skips sometimes. Well, best of luck. Sorry for being blunt. 😩

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Thanks dear friend 🥰

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Welcome 😊

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