Review Detail of Writer_7812549 in (ENG) Reincarnation With Girlfriend I (FF) : Mushoku Tensei World

You know kind of messed up when the gf did that, what a shitty gf. HMMMMMMM! Hey author can you make it so that the bf knew what the gf did and then make the bf break up with gf, and then gf turns into antagonist and bf is like "if i were to reverse time i would go back to the day i met you and stayed home" and killed the final boss(gf). But I'll give you an idealistic answer. It's very abnormal that the gf did that considering they are from normal world and the bf and gf is a teen, You should've made it so the bf and gf was more normal, so as to make story feel more natural and it could add to the couple's character growth and their relationship, so you should put more obstacles in their life to make it harder so they could mature more. And make the characters like rudeus and the other more major not just as a side character, put a difference in the timeline like a butterfly effect, so that even the minor actions can make the story feel more realistic. And also make the world background more different than just in the anime and manga Writing Quality: It's not bad and I've seen worse but it makes them seem fake or you know like a robot or sentient AI trying their best to imitate human emotion but failing miserably. So three (3). Stability of Updates: It's not consistent but it's not that long buuuut it's still shit. So two (2). Story Development: It looks bad where it's heading but I don't know if you even tried to make a good creative fanfic or book or novel or whatever you wanna call it(I really don't know). So I'll give it a fair three (3). Character Design: Like I said it's Illogical and makes them a bit 2d and makes them seem like an anime character you know considering their from earth where no sweatdrops and over-the-top dramatic falls exist. And you didn't add much of a prologue and backstory about their relationships So I can't see why I give a shit about their lives, the only thing I know is Gf is obsessive (what I meant was psychopathic) and innocent (oops I meant idiotic), so innocent in fact that she was so dumb to give him a curse-like ability to make him revolted if he touched anybody except her, she didn't realize that she didn't set a limit, so if he was revolted the moment mama and papa touched him, he could've died from too much pain(But you knooow, our favorite hero saves the day again and HIS NAME ISSSS PLOOOOT ARMOR!!!!!!! *Add John Cena Sound Effect*). Bf is a bit emo and doesn't give a shit about other people The only realistic person is Bf but your writing makes him look worse and also why doesn't Bf miss his real mom and/or dad, any other normal person would be concerned and bawling their eyes off but you know he just said WOOOO GOING TO ANIMAUY LAND!!! that makes him look more ya know just- just a weeeny teeeny psychopathic don't cha think. So I'll give it a two (2). World Background: Exact Copy I would've given it a zero if there wasn't a limit. So one it is(1).