Review Detail of Xymn in Playboy Cultivator in the Apocalypse

Can you please elaborate? This is new and I'd like to know to improve.

Yeah, so I do really enjoy the concept of the characters being more elaborate and such. It’s just when you make those characters do that all the time makes it come off as so boring and repetitive. Also you have mostly Kaze and sometimes other characters explain every thing for a event that isn’t even related to the world your building, so in turn takes up more word space. I would say more then half of the scenarios you can made can be conveyed to the reader without having to explain the whole story and the little things that the reader should be able to infer. Don’t get me wrong it is useful to explain some things about a character to establish their character traits and personality and what not, but after that’s established I feel like it doesn’t need to be done constantly for the reader to understand. I think this work is unique and great, I just personally feel as a reader that I am being treated as a idiot, as you have to explain each and every reason a character does what it does.

Thank you for pointing all of this out. It's given me some improvement points you'll see later in the story. Please know I'm not trying to patronize anyone either, the writing style comes from inexperience or fear, but I'll overcome both. If the lack of summation in speeches and announcements is counted, please take solace in that I'm aware of and have been practicing summarizing recently. That isn't a desire to justify or patronize. That comes from this desire to show, not tell, and thinking that dialogue can concisely explain something in the same space as an info dump. However, I've learned there's no difference between tell and tell, and there's always a faster way to summarize. If you mean rationaliziing character motivations I'll need to be more aware of that. The realism of my characters is challenging on WN, where drop culture is extreme. They have traits, like Kaze charming women with talks about female rights and values, that are notorious but are misconstrued (he's simping/he's a feminist) and then drop. It's ironic. That's why I try to highlight internal motivations. However, I'm in the habit of doing that with everything now, and I'll need to practice being more selective. I'm not sure where you are, but in the last 50 chapters (around 300) you'll see a major improvement in the writing as I've taken learning seriously. After 350, now, you'll notice your feedback utilized and the problem disappearing. Thank you for reading. I appreciate your feedback a lot!

Not at all! I'm very grateful. It's really helped me out of anxiety, actually, and I've already put it into action by leaving some character motivations completely off the table. Thank you. I'm grateful for feedback. So I hope I didn't sound defensive. I was just saying I'm aware and working on it, hoping you'll stick it it. It makes me happy you are. If you like it but it drives you crazy, my new novel, [Greed Online], is far more conventional in adventuring and harem life, while being offensive and outlandish. I doesn't have any speech-like info dumps and if I do POV chapters they'll be very sparingly for character development only. So it's worth considering. Thanks for reading!