It's interesting and looks promising, I read your previous story too despite many flaws it was good enough Apart from the bringing up Hermione part out of nowhere (I like the character Hermione just that you did the time travel really badly, and totally illogical, since the reasons, even the method). I have hope in this new version, I felt an improvement in the writing itself is much more fluid, when the fusion of the character is really bad he has nothing to do with anakin or dart vader and the severe part doesn't represent him well either.
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