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2024-08-27 03:49

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UndeadBeing
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The one thing that mattes the most of a nonhuman fanfic/story is keeping the mc nonhuman. Ya see, changing your mc into looking like or being human-like is the bane of any good nonhuman novel. We didn’t come her to find a human, we didn’t come her to find a half-nonhuman, the one thing we came for and was assured of in the synopsis is the nonhuman part. Now that you know why your readers bothered to open the novel, we get to the reason this novel is terrible. Mind you this could be the most well written novel in all of history but it’d still be trash. You turn your mc human-ish and remove the part and staple point for the creature you based it off. He’s no longer an enderman, he’s just a transformed human. You didn’t give the viewers a good reason to stay. You remove the looks, remove the preset expectation, and then you moved on. You said enderman and you removed the enderman. I know you’re gonna look at this and wonder why I’m not reviewing the rest of the story but honestly this one point completely overshadows any other complaint. You can’t create a novel about let’s say a dragon, then remove the dragon and move on with the novel. That’s not how stories work. Now I don’t like harem novels at all, think they’re about as useless as the people who read it(completely background side-characters) but I’d rather read that abomination of a disease that plagues webnovel than read this. This is like those gta 5 YouTubers who say “like and sun for a giveaway” but never give the stuff away, you said enderman in the synopsis but 20ish chapters in he’s no longer enderman. He doesn’t have the iconic look of an enderman and he removed the main standing point that Minecraft gave that species. Just write a normal HP fanfic and don’t label it as something you never follow through on. 5 -> 3 -> 1 -> 1 -> 3 on the ratings bottom to top

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