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PerditaTritonia
PerditaTritoniaLv12yr
2022-09-06 18:56

How you described your surroundings fit perfectly with your chosen genre. The fast pace of tbe story makes this an action oriented novel. Only I want to point out is quotation marks and punctuation. Overall, a very solid story!! Keep it up, author!!

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Boots_ups_your_ass
Boots_ups_your_assLv13

The story is pretty good, love the setting and plot. The world-building is phenomenal. I really enjoy the action scenes in both battle and bed. Ahem. Although personally, it was hard for me to get into it as the POVs changed unknowingly to me. The paragraphs are compressed into one sentence and quotations are rarely used with dialogue. A few spelling mistakes A great story but needs better structure.

2yr

Nancy_Micheal_4985
Nancy_Micheal_4985Lv12

Won't Author, I'm not a fan of action novels, but yours I can't help myself but want to read more of it, I'm impressed, your plot, characters, and background were perfectly planned, I'm looking forward to the next chapter, everything in this novel is perfect,

2yr
Kirito_K5
Kirito_K5Lv13

Okay, the story looks promising, but I got confused as I kept moving further into it, Good job tho your descriptions are superb. keep up the good work, you've got my support.

2yr
Khaluchi_8941
Khaluchi_8941Lv2

Wow. I really love futuristic novels. Especially dystopian/utopian ones and this doesn't disappoint. Although I'm not a big fan of action novels, I couldn't help but like this. The only problems I had was the grammar and punctuation use. The character descriptions could have been more polished, but asides from that, this is a novel I would love to see through till the end.

2yr
robby_fins
robby_finsLv1

As always you create very intresting work , de definitely recommend to everyone!

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lo_rezi
lo_reziLv3

character personality and plot development was superb I can't wait to read more about this book , nice work author 👍♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️♥️

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