Writing Quality: 5 Stars. Update Stability: 4 Stars. Story Development: 2 Stars. Character Design: 4 Stars. World Background: 4 Stars. Something that bothers me is the rambling and overly forced story development. MC got saved by Hero and Police and then Villain kidnapped him again, like why, just don't make arc when MC got saved, or just make MC become Villain in the start. Like Don't be half-hearted in conveying the plot. Idk Where will this story take you in the future. 3.8 Stars.
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LIKEIt was literally perfect, don't worry about it at all. The people on webnovel, whether consciously or not, are addicted to plots that fulfill wishes. That isn't what a fanfiction is. It's literally a depiction of what could be, and this definitely counts as that.
Maiku_Surudoi:The overly forced story development you talk about are a sequence of events. I don't know why people keep saying it was forced and I am trying to see it from a reader perspective. Maybe I executed it bad, but this is my first novel and I will try to improve on that in the future.
Thanks man
DotComplex:It was literally perfect, don't worry about it at all. The people on webnovel, whether consciously or not, are addicted to plots that fulfill wishes. That isn't what a fanfiction is. It's literally a depiction of what could be, and this definitely counts as that.