The story is not very good, well, I won't say that it's bad, the main character of this story is a gray mouse, if you remove him from this story, there won't be any changes, it seems that the author is a fan of Rob Stark, and that in this story the main character here is Rob Stark, and not the main character of this story, and One and the like are superfluous here, and in my opinion they should not have been introduced into this story.
Telling_Tall_Tales
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LIKETelling_Tall_Tales:Your probably right he shouldnt have, the story wasn’t very well thought out it’s my first go at writing. But it’s to late I could rewrite it but i couldn’t be bothered. Sorry glad you read even if it wasn’t up to your standards
Dave_kingmaker:This is not your first go at writing your just bad atimage
Thank you for constructive and adequate acceptance of criticism, and good luck on your way if you decide to write new works.
Telling_Tall_Tales:I appreciate the fair review by the way a lot of people just give no stars because the author did one thing wrong but you gave me what you believed my story deserved and I appreciate it.