Review Detail of Maxfun3 in X-Men: Feral Progeny (Marvel AU/What If?)
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I’m at chapter 25. I’m not sure about update stability so I won’t talk about it. I think the writing quality is good but it needs some more work. I think it needs more filler for character interactions. I think that was one of the reasons some of the relationships he delveloped in between those time skips feel forced. Like what conversations did the mc have that made him accept Laura and the others as family so fast or what was talked about that he forgave one of the love interests so easily. It’s not being “edgy” to not easily forgive someone for trying to kill you. Without showing us these moments it kinda makes it feel like the same thing that happened in Naruto and Dragon Ball Z. With a few exceptions. If you write another story I suggest you go more slowly and less consistently of time skips. I know it’s boring but it makes the story more cohesive in the long run. Especially if you’re writing romance. I think the story development is great. Unlike other stories you made me care about the MC to the point where I get slightly upset at I think stupid things happened to him because I don’t want him to have survival guilt like I gained. For instance chapter 24. Even if it have some things I don’t like, you kept me on my toes. Looking back I mixed up some things and combined them with different stuff I rated. You haven’t really explored the world yet so I can’t really rate it. All in all good job just put more character interactions and less time skips for future projects if you want more of cohesive story.
X-Men: Feral Progeny (Marvel AU/What If?)
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YO! Great review with some positives and negatives. This novel largely for me was practice in upping my pace. All of my other novels are, slow paced to a fault. I wanted sometbing more consumable in good time here with clear arcs and volumes. I think I’ve done well for most volumes but I also agree with you partially. I could benefit from some filler chapters to split the action and tension especially in volumes 1 + 2….. But that wouldn’t have helped in “explaining how he accepted Laura and the others as family” they ARE his family, and he had to accept them or die (almost like I showed what happened to Jimmy) . It was in his best interest. They saved his life, they got him training. They were mutants like him. They’re all around the same age with similar tastes. There was no speech or turning point needed for him to become close with them. They’re presented as good people with his best interest in mind up to chap 25. They all want freedom from the same person. Now most ppls issue with that is that he goes with the plot. Nobody on Webnovel likes a character that follows the story laid out for them. They want the powerhouse to take hold of fate, cause and effect, and make something for themselves alone 9/10 but that time didn’t call for it. It wouldn’t have made sense for his character. Just like what everyone wanted me to do for “love interest”. There is another way I could’ve went about doing that, but most ppls problem with that interaction was them being edgelords. I have literally indesputable reasons as to why that’s the case in that very chapter. It wouldn’t have been in Bronte’s character to continue to maim or kill her after things are settled as they were, a misunderstanding. Even so, some residual anger would’ve been good! Tdlr; I agree with your want for filler chaps. I don’t agree with some of your reasoning as to why. I agree with how you view some character interactions as flawed. But I think like many other readers, everything isn’t being taken into account. Prolly my fault. Thanks for the review! You have inspired chapter 61😎
I didn’t put this in my review because I had to get to work. Just let yourself cook. Don’t let these idiots stress you out and cause it’s going to make you resent your work. I admit as someone who does animation and wrote some scripts. I let some of my bias for fully fleshed out character interactions to show the audience the deep feelings these characters we have in our head. I get slightly irritated when I see points that can easily be showed more. So if I offended you I’m sorry. tdlr: Agree to disagree. I understand the frustration with these readers. Don’t let them get to you and cause resentment. Let yourself cook and I’m sorry if I offended you.
_Avatar0FFury_:YO! Great review with some positives and negatives. This novel largely for me was practice in upping my pace. All of my other novels are, slow paced to a fault. I wanted sometbing more consumable in good time here with clear arcs and volumes. I think I’ve done well for most volumes but I also agree with you partially. I could benefit from some filler chapters to split the action and tension especially in volumes 1 + 2….. But that wouldn’t have helped in “explaining how he accepted Laura and the others as family” they ARE his family, and he had to accept them or die (almost like I showed what happened to Jimmy) . It was in his best interest. They saved his life, they got him training. They were mutants like him. They’re all around the same age with similar tastes. There was no speech or turning point needed for him to become close with them. They’re presented as good people with his best interest in mind up to chap 25. They all want freedom from the same person. Now most ppls issue with that is that he goes with the plot. Nobody on Webnovel likes a character that follows the story laid out for them. They want the powerhouse to take hold of fate, cause and effect, and make something for themselves alone 9/10 but that time didn’t call for it. It wouldn’t have made sense for his character. Just like what everyone wanted me to do for “love interest”. There is another way I could’ve went about doing that, but most ppls problem with that interaction was them being edgelords. I have literally indesputable reasons as to why that’s the case in that very chapter. It wouldn’t have been in Bronte’s character to continue to maim or kill her after things are settled as they were, a misunderstanding. Even so, some residual anger would’ve been good! Tdlr; I agree with your want for filler chaps. I don’t agree with some of your reasoning as to why. I agree with how you view some character interactions as flawed. But I think like many other readers, everything isn’t being taken into account. Prolly my fault. Thanks for the review! You have inspired chapter 61😎
You did animation?!?! That’s so sick! 🔥 also I take no offense, if I came on too strong it’s simply me being passionate. My bad my bad 🤦🏽♂️ you made great points and I thank you for it 🫵🏽😼 also yes, I gotta cook in silence sometimes.
Maxfun3:I didn’t put this in my review because I had to get to work. Just let yourself cook. Don’t let these idiots stress you out and cause it’s going to make you resent your work. I admit as someone who does animation and wrote some scripts. I let some of my bias for fully fleshed out character interactions to show the audience the deep feelings these characters we have in our head. I get slightly irritated when I see points that can easily be showed more. So if I offended you I’m sorry. tdlr: Agree to disagree. I understand the frustration with these readers. Don’t let them get to you and cause resentment. Let yourself cook and I’m sorry if I offended you.
_Avatar0FFury_:You did animation?!?! That’s so sick! 🔥 also I take no offense, if I came on too strong it’s simply me being passionate. My bad my bad 🤦🏽♂️ you made great points and I thank you for it 🫵🏽😼 also yes, I gotta cook in silence sometimes.