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Nmastte
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2022-09-01 11:46

Want a character who thinks like madara? you will be disappointed. Besides, the two kids who get attached to him for no reason makes me think that you don't know how to write a story + it seems to be the beginning of a harem story, so that mother behaves like an incredible mother stereotype in manga. Nothing is original everything has already been done better elsewhere

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mow
mowLv4

Is he a babysitter now? Also who are the two kids

Nmastte
NmastteLv2

He is reborn so I guess the kids are the same age, and from what I understand there is no particular reason for her to even exist.

mow:Is he a babysitter now? Also who are the two kids
mow
mowLv4

Oh oops, thought he was an adult taking care of children. mb

Nmastte:He is reborn so I guess the kids are the same age, and from what I understand there is no particular reason for her to even exist.
JOSUKE
JOSUKEAuthor

Not harem.

Nmastte
NmastteLv2

Know that I don't understand you, you add two female characters who are useless to the story who "attaches" extremely quickly to the mc for no reason, I'm sorry but I don't see the difference and what yoou can think when you write it ...

JOSUKE:Not harem.
DeleteYourself
DeleteYourselfLv3

This is why i always look at all of the reviews 5 star reviews are very VERY misleading

AlmightyMAX
AlmightyMAXLv15

Make it a harem a lot of people like the concept in general as long as its not cliché and has realism behind why it formed also he had no love life in the cannon do to all the chaos meaning he can find one in his new world that's a lot more peaceful.

JOSUKE:Not harem.
Nmastte
NmastteLv2

You don't understand what I'm saying, I don't care if he kills people easily, it's not a trait of madara but of every ninja... All the philosophy of the character just as idealistic as Hashirama in another sense and all that is "trauma" make the character, I read that a long time ago so I could not specify in what I feel it lacks, but especially the story and much too cliché of cliché isekai and the thing I remember most is that the characters are empty, unrealistic and therefore indigestible for me.

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Nmastte
NmastteLv2

While I'm at it why do you like it personally I just find it unhealthy and boring to read, in the worst case it's objects that serve as a trophy for a hero who never makes any effort in any of this relationship and the two characters fall in love in three seconds for incredibly materialistic reasons and never question their choices, and also in today's world no one would accept that so you add holes in the plot if no one judges the mc badly and moreover has reasons... And in the best the characters take all the plot not to serve only as trophy and tool of sexual scene and comic moment, you have to give them a lot of time of writing and questioning of the acts of the mc of the real discussions, disputes of the misunderstanding of the other in their relationship, you should accept that if in the temperament of the character they (they) leave, the authors must think about the implications of the choices of his (her) characters if he (she) does not just want to make them to be mops ...

AlmightyMAX:Make it a harem a lot of people like the concept in general as long as its not cliché and has realism behind why it formed also he had no love life in the cannon do to all the chaos meaning he can find one in his new world that's a lot more peaceful.
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