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2024-07-11 22:40

The grammar is meh. Not offensively bad, but something you may have to take a second look at. What the real problem here is that it's brought up that he's keeping his memories, but the mc still regresses to the mindset of a middle school (at best) child. It's not the worst thing in the world, but there's so much in here that feels like filler. And there's a bit in here where half of America/the world(magically) is EMP'd and the next line isn't immediately about the death toll.

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