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AhmedIsHere
AhmedIsHereLv152yr
2022-11-03 14:46

After reading a few chapters of the book, I decided to put the book down. My main criticism is that the writing style feels slightly elementary. There are times when the past and present tenses are used right after each other in the same paragraph which takes away from the story’s emersion. Also, I personally didnt like how the main character seems slightly one dimensional. I havent read far, but the character doesn’t seem to have any substance. However, I would still give the story a chance, because you may like it.

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StumblingtoSuccess
4.5
100 Chs

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StumblingtoSuccess
StumblingtoSuccessAuthor

Thank you for the review. And I will keep that in mind. Yes, I am new so forgive me for that. But I promise I will try to improve.

2yr
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StumblingtoSuccess
StumblingtoSuccessAuthor

I have come to a decision that I will drop this novel, Cuz I do not see anyone actually reading it and The current situation in my life not going well. I don't know if anyone will read this but if anyone does someday, I have one thing to say. Thank you for at least checking my trashy novel. I am gonna write a new one, that can quench the thirst of WN general audiences. I will drop 8 more chapters for 4 days. After that Bye. And Thank you to the ones who actually stick with me(If I had one). BYE

2yr

StumblingtoSuccess
StumblingtoSuccessAuthor

I guess I have finally dropped this. Thanks for sticking with me. But. If you want to see this story continued you know what needs to happen and I know that won't happen as the WN general audience's taste is... what can I say more refined..huh. Thank you one last time.

2yr
Fanta_Hasan
Fanta_HasanLv1

hey man I have read such a good story in a very long time I hope you can publish more of it. And never stop. It has such a great potential

2yr
Flower_Something
Flower_SomethingLv2

This is very nice, everything is written nicely and fleshed out well. Cant wait to see more of it and definitely adding it to my library

2yr
Mel_Aniv
Mel_AnivLv4

The strengths: It has good plotting that was carefully made and its pacing is fine too. It has good interactions and also dialogues. Writing quality is also there and has lots of potential. Weakness: Some paragraphs needed some trimming as they were too long. The author also needs to improve the vocabulary or choice of words. Flow also sometimes stuttery. Well best of luck! And happy writing! The best is yet to come and the author has a lot more to offer! [img=recommend]

2yr
Moonwriting
MoonwritingLv4

The story was quite good I like how he picked up his life...there is so much to learn in this story. it's a must-read. l like the Leon character a lot. keep it up, dear.....

2yr
fahad_hasan_8504
fahad_hasan_8504Lv10

Wow. It is such a nice story. Every character has their own personality. They don't feel forced. Didn't have a lot of fights but I can see every fight may be meaningful in the future. I need more chapters.

2yr
SHIFTER_SANS
SHIFTER_SANSLv2

hello just me shifter here giving this novel a 10/10 AS I ALWAYS DO I THE ARCHITECT SHALL JUDGE THIS NOVEL WHEN I READ IT BE.AFRAID.OF.ME

2yr
LeonsRoad1
LeonsRoad1Lv1

I am new here so I would like to say as my first few stories I like it very much. Loved how the author brought so many twists and turns only in the arc. The second arc is about to finish and I can't wait for the next arc.

2yr
Chaos_Prime
Chaos_PrimeLv15

Eh.. I guess the story is nice? This is the author’s first time writing, I guess. There are a lot of beginner mistakes but he seems to want to improve and learn so I think people should give him a try and help whenever they can. One meaningful comment can help. But, since I know how people are here, I doubt I’ll see a lot of that. It will probably be hate and condemnation. But, at least some people who like this novel will try and help the author. I wish him luck. I didn’t read a lot so this could be counted as a spam review since I didn’t say anything meaningful.

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