Review Detail of Novo in My OP Minion System in the Apocalypse

An amateur... poorly thought out story with a decent beginning, no climax, no over-arching plot, more holes than Swiss cheese, and no ending. Also the male and female leads bare zero similarity to themselves a hundred chapters prior. In no way shape or form feel like they're the same people. It's just not a good story man... I'm sorry... maybe re-write it six or seven times and I'm sure by the 8th rendition you'll have something readable.