Can't really say much cuz this story only has 2 chapters but this is really good so far. From what I can get from this so far is that the author is really good at setting an atmosphere that can get you to really feel how the characters mind set are in the given situations. This is a warning because there are ppl in this site that dont like this for whatever reason but this story is most likely a SI / OC, harem, power fantasy, and a tiny bit of time stuff. As a disclamer this doesn't mean that this is bad but that they will likely exist in this ff to a verring degree. There might be a problem for some people to get into this cuz this will likely take lore stuff from the game so you might want to have a passing familiarity with arknights to get the "full experience" whatever that means to you. Going back to what this story so far I feel does pretty good on is that there are little to no gramatical errors i can find but thats not saying much as im a casual reader that wouldn't care if it wasnt too bad. The the story is also trying to be lore accurate so if you get confused its problebly has to do with the scource material. Overall this is a pretty good story that has a lot of potential but might be hard to get into due to needing to at least have an idea about the game arknights to fully understand the intricit lore details but that isn't needed to have a fun time to enjoy what will problably be a really good story.
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Thank you for the review! I must admit, it does have slight bit of self-insert since I instinctually find myself thinking of what I'd do if I were to be placed in the character's predicament so I'm guilty of that charge. As for the power scaling well, he isn't actually too powerful post prologue (You'll understand in the later chapters) but he does gradually get stronger after he gathers more of those crystals that carry pieces of his soul that are still missing. The harem is, admittedly, larger than what I'd usually prefer but I'll try my best not to make my story's romance similar to those where mc meets woman, falls in love, then repeats the process with a new girl. As for the time stuff, well, I'm not sure which elements it encapsulates but I can assure you that this time travel stuff is a one time thing and any reference to his past timeline would just be memories or monologues about why he does something or what changes he hopes to bring about by doing it.
thx for clarifying and to try :) those things mentioned as negitives aren't really that for me, they are story points used to build character and help world building the only reasonI I "warned" about them in my review is cuz ppl on this site seem to have an unhealthy obsession of complaining about them (no that much as in the past from what I can see) so I hope this didn't feel as harsh as I might be imagining. Anyways your doing amazing work so far and keep it up. criticisms are subjective and therefore can be ignored or absorbed into a story so do with your works as you want and the ppl who like it will stay and those who don't should not nit pick about the things that are there for the story like complaining about the plot in a point in the story where it will most likely be explained later. Again the story you are making so far is amazing and I hope you enjoy your time writing it :)
You have to make dense Mc if you not I will hire Bitcoin assassin to kill you, understand!!!! I hate hypocrite self righteous scum bag Mc the most so don't do that, Sigma dense mc is way to go, trust me!!!!!!! my reference is Ayanokōji smart and cunning yet don't understand simple things properly.
...What?
…Are you retard by any chance?
You can't take joke mate you make me sad.
Sorry about that, being in WN for so long made me question the inteligente of people
Some time trying to be stupid is not bad you know, it help you clear stress system in you head.
Maybe, maybe not
