it's a great story. Nice plot too but the POV is very confusing. I suggest you stick to one person or third person point of view. it would greatly improve the readability. Overall, keep up the good work.

The story's pretty good. I'm personally an atheist so I'm not into the gods aspect but it's written very well. the characters are very unique as well as the way the author writes!

So, a good novel. The grammar is pretty okay, not the best, but pretty okay. The writing style is unique and it catches your attention pretty well. Overall, a good novel.

indeed a very good story, the author did a great job with the plot and I like where the story is going. good job author and keep writing.

Names are in capital Some were hard to read Out of character but but yeah But liked the crossover and the thing you did with the gods names

I'm really sorry about the low notes, but I can't bring myself to give more. Your writing quality leaves greatly to desire, for many reasons. The first one is, your English needs some work. Many typos and misplaced capitalization. Your paragraphs are monstrously long for a web novel. You might want to shorten them to 2 sentences per paragraph. Next is your constant switch between 1st and 3rd person views. You should really choose one and stick to it. Then comes the descriptions. You use many many words, to describe next to nothing. If everything in a room is gold, silver, and red, don't describe the entire room piece by piece. That's just filling. Also, don't use the same subject 3 times in the same sentence, it causes redundancy. Next point now, story development. I feel like you tried to make the story develop, but instead, only monologue your protagonist's actions. Your flow was all busted because of it. Take your time, rushing only brings to scuffed work :) I can see you tried to describe your characters intensely, but all you described was their emotions and what they wear. That leaves next to nothing to your readers on who the character actually is. Give life to your characters. Not just the instant emotion, but how they got there, and what reason they have to be mad/sad/happy. As for world background, unless you describe it in your preceding chapters after the second, there was none. Keep in mind that your first chapters are here to hook your readers. If all they read is that the protagonist is mad, that leaves little want to keep reading. Try describing important stuff, like what is the world they are in. You give names, and call them gods, but gods of what? Give your readers some meat to sink their teeth into. The work needs work, but it could have potential if exploited correctly. Keep working on your style, keep improving, and you could go far :)

The description of the story was very well written as the characters are perfectly done by the author, Impressive! But the constant amount of description upon the color of the character design is overrated, you should pick the right words to make the world balance and well described. I personally love Mathilda, if she is a loli I'll love her more, I do hope you make many chapters soon.

Nice story until now, the author manmaged to place the groundwork of the story, but I have to tell you that you have to improve your English. There are some typos but that's not the problem, the problem is the very difficult to follow flow of the writing style and the many repetitions that make the read much heavier and boring. The world building and character design are very well made until now, great expectations. I hope you improve your writing that would make the novel that much better and fun to read. Keep it up, I'll keep it in sight.

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