Don't know what to say really. The grammar is poor, many mistakes that are repeated but the author asks not to mind them. I wouldn't mind them if they were fixed later but they aren't, author desperately needs an editor to make the story coherent and even change words as the author uses completely wrong words at times. The story itself is bland, very average with poor pacing and even poorer character development. Everything is just thrown into your face suddenly and then disappears and you're just supposed to forget about it. The characters are very 2 dimensional, they are in the story to serve one specific purpose without question. Overall the story is bland, poor writing, and poor characters. The world is pretty cool though
Matsuba_Kuroe
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LIKEI read a comment about your story being good and high-quality and then being gutter trash imagine me.
Matsuba_Kuroe:Yes, the world is petty cool, thanks 😑.