Review Detail of SilentWatcher in Hollywood Zenith

Item: Hollywood Zenith
Rating: 4.4

Review detail

SilentWatcherLv141yrSilentWatcher

It's a pretty good story so far. minor and confusing grammar errors. For example in the second chapter (minor spoiler) the child wraped in cloth, they keep switching gender he, her, and back to being a boy. This isn't a final rating as the author is still editing. So far if they gave a general description of the characters like hair color, eye color, mentioning Britain helped, hopefully this helps and the author sees this.

Hollywood Zenith

devonsewn

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SilentWatcherLv14SilentWatcher

Sorry it was chapter 4.

1yr

devonsewnAuthordevonsewn

Thanks for pointing out my error. I correct it. As for grammar, you must have already felt that English is not my first language, I will try to improve as I write more and more. Enjoy!

1yr

SilentWatcherLv14SilentWatcher

Ah more respect to you then! I am not good at learning languages. For a second language it is pretty good! I've read more sense my review, I think I'll be here until the end.

devonsewn:Thanks for pointing out my error. I correct it. As for grammar, you must have already felt that English is not my first language, I will try to improve as I write more and more. Enjoy!

1yr

devonsewnAuthordevonsewn

Thanks you. English is 4th in my language hierarchy. Just trying to move it up the ladder.

SilentWatcher:Ah more respect to you then! I am not good at learning languages. For a second language it is pretty good! I've read more sense my review, I think I'll be here until the end.

1yr