Honestly couldn’t get over the unnecessarily weird start you gave and feel like it’s going to play a part later in the story which I don’t like. Also frankly his entry into the world was unnecessarily grim and I feel like that’s you setting the tone for the story which is macabre. To reiterate I am not the kind of reader who can appreciate that. Otherwise interesting premise.
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