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ItsHashi
ItsHashiLv42yr
2022-08-11 16:49

Hmm... i read through it, i would recommend making the chapters a little longer since with only 3-5 paragraphs its not enough. The chapter titles, i’d recommend doin it like ”(Ch.1) Title” that way the “chapter” doesnt take too much space. I should also separate paragraphs and make them shorter, a good way of separating the paragraphs is when people talk. You shouldnt put two dialogues in one paragraph since that doesnt happen in the same moment. Thats it from me right mow and dont give up with the story. Fight on💪😤💪!

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A_fed_up_reader
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I love the story so far, it's interesting and yeah you could try to improve your synopsis .there are grammatical mistakes but everything else is good .I look forward to future chapters .just keep updating regularly without fail

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Ready_
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I must say that romance is not usually my cup of tea and it's still not but, what belongs to one must be given back to that person, the grammar is good and the story is progressing, not getting hindered by anything, the world is given a background and many common questions are answered right away, the characters are well fleshed out as well, only issue is the large size of the paragraph wich make the reading a bit complicated but overall, it''s fine craft.

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Wow, it is an amazing book. I like the cover, story telling also the characters name. Mira and Summer, cool. Keep writing, Author. [img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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Eclipse_Ranger
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A very good story for those who love romance................................................................................. ... ...... .......................

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just gonna leaeve a review and by the way its a good story..................................................................................................................................................................................................

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Ona_Gold
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Your synopsis is kind of confusing but when I read the story I can say that the story idea is really good. It's an interesting read with few errors. I'd love if you can shorten the paragraphs though, it makes the book look clunky. I'll add this to my library in anticipation of more chapters. 😇

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While the writing style leaves quite a bit to be desired as it was quite confusing at times. It has quite the interesting concept. Full of thrilling mysteries and if you are especially particular about this genre, I can gurantee that you'd be having dreams to figure what happens next. I recommend giving it a read

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Not your everyday fantasy book. the author brought the characters to life. The blurb was what caught my attention. I do have one complaint though. please upload more chapters as soon as possible. Expecting more from this author

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I love the way the book is going, it's an amazing book,it keeps you captivated, and on the edge, I love the character development , can't wait for the next update.

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The story is very captivating , I love the story line , the characters, I love the way the story is heading and also the way the Author put everything all together, I must give these book a five star

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