Interesting novel, it's a good read but i'd like to point out a few flaws in it if you don't mind. First of all- You might want to edit your synopsis. Make it shorter, explain only the main things and not just everything, the rest is up to the reader to read and find out. Second- Try placing quotation marks in your conversation and indicate who is saying what. e.g "Why are you holding my bag?" Tina asked in surprise; Something like that. Third- Try to fix the structure of your sentence overall I hope you're not offended, am just pointing the things that if fixed would attract more readers. But do keep it up, your novel is interesting and fascinating and the fact that I've always had a thing for high school novels makes me more attracted to it. Added to my library~
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