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Kittylovely
KittylovelyLv32yr
2022-08-05 19:26

Interesting novel, it's a good read but i'd like to point out a few flaws in it if you don't mind. First of all- You might want to edit your synopsis. Make it shorter, explain only the main things and not just everything, the rest is up to the reader to read and find out. Second- Try placing quotation marks in your conversation and indicate who is saying what. e.g "Why are you holding my bag?" Tina asked in surprise; Something like that. Third- Try to fix the structure of your sentence overall I hope you're not offended, am just pointing the things that if fixed would attract more readers. But do keep it up, your novel is interesting and fascinating and the fact that I've always had a thing for high school novels makes me more attracted to it. Added to my library~

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Adeyanju_Faith
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17 Chs

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Adeyanju_Faith
Adeyanju_FaithAuthor

Thank you so much for reading 🙏 I tried to edit some, but I didn't get how to do it. I really appreciate your point of view. God bless you 😇🥰

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Adeyanju_Faith
Adeyanju_FaithAuthor

A very interesting stories I know the unknown story is yet to be reveal. I can't wait to see more of this. Keep it up authoress. I have read about your other stories too my evidence and hunted house they are really an amazing stories to read.

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Little_North_Star
Little_North_StarLv14

Nice book, love the synopis, the tittle, im a fan of historical romance so im definitely go to read it[img=recommend][img=recommend][img=recommend]

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wookie0_
wookie0_Lv2

I enjoyed the story well done author character has depth, pacing is good, no glaring mistakes keep posting and do not give up. Let's hit 100 chapters

2yr
DaoistNotAvilable
DaoistNotAvilableLv1

The plot-line is pretty interesting, and the story build-up is good. the teen romance aspects in the first two chapters is cute. but it does become a little confusing and tiring trying to separate the conversations from the rest of the story. do go back and re-edit your already uploaded chapters. this will make it easier for the readers to appreciate your story more. :)

2yr
Marianne_2020
Marianne_2020Lv4

this is just great, it is fun and lovely, and with an amazing storyline author, I'm hitched by the story development and character design I really can't wait for the continuation.

2yr
Yuri_Antigone
Yuri_AntigoneLv12

I love the story, it has a good start, I love the characters it's ten over ten I highly recommend 💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜💜

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aleksandra_pano10
aleksandra_pano10Lv1

The story itself is good it gives me vibes of adolescent problems at first chapters but after reading the synopsis im even more excited for the story. I think it'll be a very good thriller/ mistery story [img=recommend]

2yr
Roth_Raven
Roth_RavenLv13

This is really a good novel 😃 From the start it was already interesting and also enjoyable[img=update][img=update][img=update] Please do write more 😁😁

2yr
DonDenis
DonDenisLv2

I've read a few chapters into the book and it doesn't disappoint. The plot's straight forward and the grammatical construct of the story is just okay. A solid read. keep it up author!

2yr
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