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IamBoredGuy
IamBoredGuyLv42yr
2022-08-27 12:18

The story is good but the writing style is abhorrent. I suggest reading some writing tips in Google, or copying the writing style of other famous works to improve. I had problems reading because there is too many unnecessary details such as what the MC is looking at or other rephrased words in the same paragraph. If you could condense the message and get straight to the point for example: 'I opened the door and went out.' Not: 'I turned the doorknob and pulled the door open, then, looking at the apartment one last time, I closed it.' Your writing isn't even that immersive so there is no point in adding pointless details. Overall, it's good. Just fix the writing style and grammar and your set.

Danganronpa: dangerous road.

ImagineBreaker
4.3
38 Chs

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IamBoredGuy
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Changed my mind after reading the latest chapter. This story is trash.

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ImagineBreaker
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Yes, I know that. The new chapters already have corrections.

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