Review Detail of The_Paragon_White in Journey to the One Piece
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There are bad One Piece stories, and there is this one that is the extreme culmination of them. There are so many negative points that I would spend hours writing here, but I will just say one, he shares the powers he gains from the System, character models and such, with other people. Proving that the author is no more than fourteen or fifteen years old, because it is very naive of him to do so — it does not make the realistic point of being betrayed in the future.
Journey to the One Piece
thelightedghost
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Twenty-eight years old, a fat guy who lives with his parents, eats Cheetos and jerks off — is that what you meant? Since only someone like that would write this kind of story. Logical answer? All is well then. How about the lack of depth in all the characters, an inconsequential protagonist who acts one way and then another? Lack of detail or realism? Want more?
thelightedghost:I m 28. And i have said this before too. If you think that it's cool to live alone and be all powerful all alone then that's your fetish.. Don't think that everyone thinks like you. If you want to insult someone make it more logical not done BS like this
I m quite lean thanks to gym and no I have no bad habits . Yes I don't eat any junk food. Attacking personal now. Are we? And talking about depth? Sure I would have gone for depth if it was based on story that didn't have original story in it. It's a fan fiction and that too following the main storyline. If I explain more it will waste of words. U can criticize that in my original novel which I would have taken it like a champ but no. U attacked the same point in a fan fiction which doesn't make any sense
The_Paragon_White:Twenty-eight years old, a fat guy who lives with his parents, eats Cheetos and jerks off — is that what you meant? Since only someone like that would write this kind of story. Logical answer? All is well then. How about the lack of depth in all the characters, an inconsequential protagonist who acts one way and then another? Lack of detail or realism? Want more?
Firstly, I didn't attack, I gave my honest opinion about a “bad” story, to prevent people from wasting their precious time on such a thing. And you're right about it being a fanfiction, but this also reflects on the author's writing ability, making it clear that it is mediocre to the point that even a twelve year old child could do better. And finally, I don't care what you think, do or think... Have a great week, mediocre writer.
thelightedghost:I m quite lean thanks to gym and no I have no bad habits . Yes I don't eat any junk food. Attacking personal now. Are we? And talking about depth? Sure I would have gone for depth if it was based on story that didn't have original story in it. It's a fan fiction and that too following the main storyline. If I explain more it will waste of words. U can criticize that in my original novel which I would have taken it like a champ but no. U attacked the same point in a fan fiction which doesn't make any sense
You sure did type a lot for a person who didn't seem to care. Normally I would look over such reviews but attacking personal, calling me child and other showed what kind of a person you are. Anyways . Thanks for not showing your face here anymore
The_Paragon_White:Firstly, I didn't attack, I gave my honest opinion about a “bad” story, to prevent people from wasting their precious time on such a thing. And you're right about it being a fanfiction, but this also reflects on the author's writing ability, making it clear that it is mediocre to the point that even a twelve year old child could do better. And finally, I don't care what you think, do or think... Have a great week, mediocre writer.
thelightedghost:You sure did type a lot for a person who didn't seem to care. Normally I would look over such reviews but attacking personal, calling me child and other showed what kind of a person you are. Anyways . Thanks for not showing your face here anymore