This story has a great idea going. The whole wishes thing and multiple yet same protagonists. And since its in the original marvel, it seems more interesting than most. But I do have some problem with It. 1st. The pace. yeah it's true it didn't happen instantly, but Natasha got too interested too fast. I mean she is a spy for goodness sake. She should have been skeptical for at least 30 chapters in my opinion. 2nd. I dont know if you just don't care, but when you are writing a story, you don't just change stuff out of nowhere. Once something is published, you stick with it. Even if it's trash. okay I guess i can understand that driving yourself further down a black hole is bad, but at least cover your tracks. Rewrite of as if the chapter you want changed. Then put a note to the original readers that there was change. This way, the new readers will have a smooth experience.
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I get what you mean, and I'd honestly love to this story to be great, but I simply lack a few things. for example, 1: I'm seriously bad at writing romance, I won't deny that at all. I'm also just a teenager who's just about to finish highschool, and because of being in a pretty old traditional and religious county, just doesn't have that much romantic experience to begin with. I'm also really not a big fan of just romantic books, and I simply can't find good books with romance and action in it, so my improvement in that part is kinda slow. 2: At the moment, I seriously don't have that much time. because of my exams approaching, even writing new chapters takes a lot of time. but after finishing my exams, I may come back and fix them. and thanks for the review, appreciate it!
Eso me recuerda a otra historia similar a esta y en ella, Natasha se demoró como 100 capitulos en abrirse con el MC y aún así, aún tienen sus matices de sospecha y no le cuenta toda la verdad sobre lo que quiere y siente, la dinámica de ellos 2 es interesante por eso ya que ella siempre le saca información sin que el lo note. Incluso llegó al punto de tener 2 línea de pensamiento al mismo tiempo para cubrir sus verdaderos pensamientos de la lectura de mentes del MC.
I hce bo idea what you saying bro. mind translating?
