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It's a novel with an interesting concept and powers mixed between different worlds but separated (you have to travel to other worlds), it's an original idea. I admit that it's very difficult to go beyond the first 10-15 chapters since the rhythm is very long, but after that it starts to become interesting. Now i'm going to talk a bit about the MC (I read until chapter 60): For the moment the MC is neither a Hero nor a Villain, he does what he wants and has not yet found his objective. The personality of the MC towards these members of Harem is rather submissive or more precisely he becomes submissive very quickly for his girlfriends, I am not saying that one should not spoil his girlfriends or love them less (because a man must always take care of his family and his wives), but the Mc must always have a vertebral column and does not allow himself to be dominated in everything they ask to do, you have to find a balance otherwise he will become like the Japanese MCs (SIMP) and he can no longer control his emotions, if you understand what I mean. Also, he's a bit smart since he's not a reincarnated or transmigrated person and he had a bit of a rough childhood with his father not around all the time and his mother dead, but he is immature, also relations are very rushed except for Robin and Mia who took their time. I found some inconsistency like: In chapter 5 : ( Is she talking about that fruit in that anime 'One Piece'?), when he ate the devil fruit the first time, he should have an idea of this world and how it works, but after he eats a 2nd fruit of the devil??? He will have to know for the Haki too and that the devils fruits have weaknesses, but he jumps in the sea and almost died. He wakes up after 11 months and no question what happened and just says, oh yes i just grew up now. Roger is his father according to the description, so there is a lot of mystery and that's good, but you have to explain a little in each chapter or two so as not to leave the reader without understanding the context. also, I find that you failed to convey Roger's true personality. Another thing, the power he gains starts going to his head and he becomes arrogant and careless and gets hurt if he finds a little powerful opponent. (example: chapter 28). Also, I think you underestimate the power of the rings of Soul Land too much compared to the power of One Piece, because in power there is Soul Land and Dragon Ball after the rest comes (it's normal that Chinese cultivation novels are very strong since in Soul Land there are 3rd, 2nd, 1st order gods and even God King and Supreme God King, and Dragon Ball we have Zeno / Great Priest / Zalama (Dragon God) and Goku who has not yet reached his full potential) while the maximum of One piece is Xebec / Roger prime / White Beard prime / Garp prime. Just a advice : it is necessary to separate a large paragraph into a small paragraph to simplify and read the chapter easily, and there's too much info in the paragraphs and it's hard to understand sometimes. For the grammar, I am not able to judge your work since English is my third language. Overall, it's a good novel, difficult at first but starting to get good after Chapter 15. I'm rating 4 stars in the hope of getting even better and i hope you continue to do a good work. PS: this is only my personal point of view, and I ask readers to read and take a general idea of the novel before giving a review.
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I get what you're saying, and I'll try comment on few things : - I plan to edit (not re-write) the 30 first chapters, and already started on doing so. - But I will re-write few details of the 'mystery', who seems to be confusing, in very few paragraph (not changing the story whatsoever) for coherent read. - Power balance: Think-about-it... the 3-powers-conflict... (o.p=) Control an element completely to the maximum. VS. (soul land=) slowly develop techniques of using elements/powers. VS. (dbz=) pure Cultivation, but also high-level technology [Remember, all the 3 world got 'cultivation', from Haki, to soul-levels (1-100), and power levels read (dbz) ... The result? It's like building a character in a game, 'you got certain amounts of points, where do you invest them in?'] [Example: O.P. admiral's fight (Ice v. Magma) is few-days-long, and make the whole island change it climate... it's insane powers... like the mere fact Logia-devil-fruit is almost invincible in all the other manga, like, how can you beat electricity? smoke? fire? poison? darkness? ... and even that, what makes one stronger then the other? cultivation in one-piece is probably a solid-fact, just without numbers]. Thanks for the read and the detailed review, and if I can say I've learnt from your comment something... Is that I'm already using fan-fic, so I better use the reader previous knowledge as the basis for the mystery, of how the worlds integrate. I hope you keep on reading, and maybe have another comment in the future :) ty.
Yes, i will continue to read after accumulating several chapters and best of luck. One last info, even with admirals powers like magma or ice, they can still lose to people like Roger or Shanks or Rayleigh Prime (who don't have devil fruit), and rather cultivation in O.P is in terms of Chinese culture is cultivation of the body, because the stronger the body, the more it can use devil fruit and advanced Haki. I understand that you need to balance the powers since there are several worlds but Soul Land and Dragon Ball remains the top in terms of power. I also hope that you have taken into account the part of the submissive personality of the Mc with his girlfriends since the novel is only the beginning and you can go far (between 500 and 1000 chapters) if you continue to write :) Good evening, until next time.
Die_Jobb:I get what you're saying, and I'll try comment on few things : - I plan to edit (not re-write) the 30 first chapters, and already started on doing so. - But I will re-write few details of the 'mystery', who seems to be confusing, in very few paragraph (not changing the story whatsoever) for coherent read. - Power balance: Think-about-it... the 3-powers-conflict... (o.p=) Control an element completely to the maximum. VS. (soul land=) slowly develop techniques of using elements/powers. VS. (dbz=) pure Cultivation, but also high-level technology [Remember, all the 3 world got 'cultivation', from Haki, to soul-levels (1-100), and power levels read (dbz) ... The result? It's like building a character in a game, 'you got certain amounts of points, where do you invest them in?'] [Example: O.P. admiral's fight (Ice v. Magma) is few-days-long, and make the whole island change it climate... it's insane powers... like the mere fact Logia-devil-fruit is almost invincible in all the other manga, like, how can you beat electricity? smoke? fire? poison? darkness? ... and even that, what makes one stronger then the other? cultivation in one-piece is probably a solid-fact, just without numbers]. Thanks for the read and the detailed review, and if I can say I've learnt from your comment something... Is that I'm already using fan-fic, so I better use the reader previous knowledge as the basis for the mystery, of how the worlds integrate. I hope you keep on reading, and maybe have another comment in the future :) ty.
I understand what you mean and check it out. As for submissive, well, he's doing whatever he want, everyone agree with anything he does, he got harem, support, and free like a bird, but I believe you will find his 'character typecast' change in Vol.03, as it will be focus more on character growth, as Vol.01 was more discovering/exploring the world, Vol.02 more of discovering/exploring his part in the world, for him and his family, and Vol.03 will be the focus of MC character-growth in the world, and stabilization of the family, plus the houses/islands becoming 'kingdom building'. thanks again, I'll focus on the edit, and writing, with also your comments in mind :)
Dark_Crow_Dao:Yes, i will continue to read after accumulating several chapters and best of luck. One last info, even with admirals powers like magma or ice, they can still lose to people like Roger or Shanks or Rayleigh Prime (who don't have devil fruit), and rather cultivation in O.P is in terms of Chinese culture is cultivation of the body, because the stronger the body, the more it can use devil fruit and advanced Haki. I understand that you need to balance the powers since there are several worlds but Soul Land and Dragon Ball remains the top in terms of power. I also hope that you have taken into account the part of the submissive personality of the Mc with his girlfriends since the novel is only the beginning and you can go far (between 500 and 1000 chapters) if you continue to write :) Good evening, until next time.
Die_Jobb:I understand what you mean and check it out. As for submissive, well, he's doing whatever he want, everyone agree with anything he does, he got harem, support, and free like a bird, but I believe you will find his 'character typecast' change in Vol.03, as it will be focus more on character growth, as Vol.01 was more discovering/exploring the world, Vol.02 more of discovering/exploring his part in the world, for him and his family, and Vol.03 will be the focus of MC character-growth in the world, and stabilization of the family, plus the houses/islands becoming 'kingdom building'. thanks again, I'll focus on the edit, and writing, with also your comments in mind :)
no yuri because i don't like it too (at least until chapter 60) afterwards, i haven't yet found time to continue reading the novel. for the teasing between Harem, the author mentioned if i remember correctly that he will stop it since it's not very attractive for the majority of readers (Like me Lol).
Drigok_Yuri_Is_NTR:hey quick question since you read so far could you let me know how the yuri is?(since not a fan of it) Author said it is harem-harmless-teasing( that's OK depending on how far it goes ) or do they go all the way even with mc there?
Well thanks for letting me know at least I can read untill chap 60 with peace of mind then see how I feel. thanks again 😊
Dark_Crow_Dao:no yuri because i don't like it too (at least until chapter 60) afterwards, i haven't yet found time to continue reading the novel. for the teasing between Harem, the author mentioned if i remember correctly that he will stop it since it's not very attractive for the majority of readers (Like me Lol).