The blurb promises a very interesting story that really piqued my interest. The second chapter could have made more impact if it was described thoroughly, specifically, the physical structure of the "new world". I agree with one of the comments, second chapter lacks tension from the main character. When someone was suddenly transported to a new world, the initial reaction would be to get confused and ask questions. On the writing style, there were minimal grammatical errors but as a reader, I don't really mind that much as long as it's understandable overall. This is a very promising story, kudos to the writer! 👏🏻
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Yes, I deliberately made that on second chapter. There is a secret behind his lack of tension. I want readers to think themselves first and I will show the secrets one by one in the future chapters. That's the style I would like to write in this novel. I will check and edit the grammatical mistakes too. Thanks a lot for you review.
I see 🥰 I'll be looking forward to it.
Sage_Tranquil:Yes, I deliberately made that on second chapter. There is a secret behind his lack of tension. I want readers to think themselves first and I will show the secrets one by one in the future chapters. That's the style I would like to write in this novel. I will check and edit the grammatical mistakes too. Thanks a lot for you review.
