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2022-08-21 00:43

So it was great until the end part with the father, specifically the part about her leg being snapped. Her fear and confusion is written nicely but not the snapping leg part. The mc wasn’ t horrified or confused, wasn’ t screaming in pain or shaking in disgust- just went to her bed and looked at her cashapp? As if her leg wasn’t broken? Im assuming she’ s going to the hospital in the next ch? Anyways the book is good but that could be elaborated a bit more

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